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Now that Japanese fertility rate is at its lowest level, population is rapidly declining, leading to economic downsize. As the economic power falls, Japan’s international presence won’t be as prominent as before. However, Japanese should continue to take an active role in world affairs for the benefit of the country. To do so, Japanese government should strengthen English education as a national policy to ensure that students can acquire practical language skills so that they can be influential in the international community In the future.
In my arrogant opinion, Japanese people are unlike other Asian countries such as China and Korea, highly respected in the global community. It is because most Japanese people are polite, hospitable, and respectful to others as well as places they visit. For example, Japanese athletes never protest unfair judgments from referees in the international competitions, instead they refrain themselves from getting upset, sustain polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect opponents. On the other hand, when Chinese and Korean athletes cannot accept judgement, they protest so badly that they cry, yell and leave without shaking hands with opponents in a show of respect. Moreover, in restaurants, many foreigners are deeply impressed by waiters’ hospitality. They say how polite and kind they are. It is also famous that Japanese fans willingly clean up their surroundings in a soccer stadium after a match.
Japanese people are modest (not showy) in personality, yet their craftsmanships are very much professional and high in quality. Japan’s exported goods are highly appreciated. This humble and dedicated nature is a kind of virtue that they have long inherited from their ancestors over generations.
However, when looking at the world, this humble and modest characteristics of Japanese personality might give somewhat negative impressions on some foreigners. In the ever-competitive global realm, it is better to make one’s opinions known and approach people with own views. We need to understand that modesty is no longer a virtue outside of Japan. Instead, it could become an obstacle for us to achieve something great in overseas.
In essence, acquiring language skills is a key to improving our communication skills. Successful communication skills will enable us to better persuade and negotiate with others. It will even let us engage in leadership roles in international organizations. Developing global human resource is going to be decisive factors to enhance global competitiveness. Therefore, Japanese government must address the challenges to foster students who could be influential in the world by providing practical English education.
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**Revised:**
Now that the Japanese fertility rate is at its lowest level, the population is rapidly declining, leading to economic downsizing. As economic power falls, Japan’s international presence won’t be as prominent as before. However, Japanese people should continue to take an active role in world affairs for the benefit of the country. To do so, the Japanese government should strengthen English education as a national policy to ensure that students can acquire practical language skills so they can be influential in the international community in the future.
In my opinion, Japanese people are, unlike those from other Asian countries such as China and Korea, highly respected in the global community. This is because most Japanese people are polite, hospitable, and respectful to others as well as to the places they visit. For example, Japanese athletes never protest unfair judgments from referees in international competitions. Instead, they refrain from getting upset, maintain polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect their opponents. On the other hand, when Chinese and Korean athletes cannot accept a judgment, they protest so badly that they cry, yell, and leave without shaking hands with their opponents in a show of respect. Moreover, in restaurants, many foreigners are deeply impressed by waiters’ hospitality, noting how polite and kind they are. It is also well-known that Japanese fans willingly clean up their surroundings in a soccer stadium after a match.
Japanese people are modest in personality, yet their craftsmanship is highly professional and of high quality. Japan’s exported goods are highly appreciated. This humble and dedicated nature is a kind of virtue that they have long inherited from their ancestors over generations.
However, when looking at the world, these humble and modest characteristics of the Japanese personality might give somewhat negative impressions to some foreigners. In the ever-competitive global realm, it is better to make one’s opinions known and approach people with one's own views. We need to understand that modesty is no longer a virtue outside of Japan. Instead, it could become an obstacle for us to achieve something great overseas.
In essence, acquiring language skills is key to improving our communication skills. Successful communication skills will enable us to better persuade and negotiate with others. They will even let us engage in leadership roles in international organizations. Developing global human resources is going to be a decisive factor in enhancing global competitiveness. Therefore, the Japanese government must address the challenges of fostering students who can be influential in the world by providing practical English education.
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**Specific Corrections and Improvements:**
1. "economic downsize" to "economic downsizing"
2. "However, Japanese should continue" to "However, Japanese people should continue"
3. "Japanese government" to "the Japanese government"
4. "in the international community In the future" to "in the international community in the future"
5. "In my arrogant opinion" to "In my opinion" (removing "arrogant" for a more neutral tone)
6. "polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect opponents" to "polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect their opponents"
7. "leave without shaking hands with opponents in a show of respect" to "leave without shaking hands with their opponents in a show of respect"
8. "craftsmanships are very much professional and high in quality" to "craftsmanship is highly professional and of high quality"
9. "humble and modest characteristics of Japanese personality" to "humble and modest characteristics of the Japanese personality"
10. "own views" to "one's own views"
11. "Developing global human resource is going to be decisive factors" to "Developing global human resources is going to be a decisive factor"
12. "Japanese government" to "the Japanese government"
### 和訳
現在、日本の出生率は過去最低を記録しており、人口は急速に減少しています。その結果、経済規模は縮小し、経済力が低下することで、日本の国際的な存在感は以前ほど顕著ではなくなるでしょう。しかし、日本人は自国の利益のために、引き続き世界情勢に積極的に関与すべきです。そのためには、日本政府が国策として英語教育を強化し、学生が実践的な言語スキルを身につけることができるようにする必要があります。これにより、将来的に国際社会で影響力を持つことができるでしょう。
私の傲慢な意見では、日本人は中国や韓国のような他のアジア諸国とは異なり、世界的に高く評価されています。これは、日本人の多くが礼儀正しく、親切で、訪れる場所や人々に対して敬意を払うからです。例えば、日本のアスリートは国際大会で審判の不公平な判定に抗議することはなく、代わりに怒りを抑え、礼儀正しい態度を維持し、対戦相手への敬意を忘れません。一方で、中国や韓国のアスリートは判定を受け入れられない場合、激しく抗議し、泣いたり叫んだり、相手と握手せずに立ち去ることがあります。また、レストランでは、多くの外国人がウェイターの親切さに深く感動しています。彼らは礼儀正しく親切であると言います。また、日本のサッカーファンが試合後に自分たちの周囲を進んで清掃することも有名です。
日本人は控えめな性格ですが、その職人技は非常にプロフェッショナルで高品質です。日本の輸出品は高く評価されています。この謙虚で献身的な性質は、先祖から代々受け継がれてきた美徳です。
しかし、世界を見渡すと、日本人のこの謙虚で控えめな性格は、外国人に対してやや否定的な印象を与えるかもしれません。競争が激しいグローバルな世界では、自分の意見を明確にし、自分の考えを持って人々に接することが重要です。日本国外では、謙虚さはもはや美徳ではなく、むしろ海外で何かを達成するための障害となり得ることを理解する必要があります。
要するに、言語スキルを習得することは、コミュニケーションスキルの向上に不可欠です。成功したコミュニケーションスキルは、他人をより説得し、交渉する能力を向上させます。それは、国際機関でリーダーシップを発揮することさえ可能にします。国際的な競争力を高めるためには、グローバルな人材を育成することが決定的な要因となります。したがって、日本政府は、実践的な英語教育を提供することによって、世界で影響力を持つことができる学生を育成するという課題に取り組む必要があります。
### 評価
この意見書は、日本の現在の課題とそれに対する提案を具体的に述べています。以下の点で評価できます：
1. **問題の明確な提示**：出生率の低下とそれによる経済力の低下という現実的な問題を明確に提示しています。
2. **国際的な視点**：日本が国際社会で影響力を持ち続けるための具体的な戦略（英語教育の強化）を提案しています。
3. **文化的な考察**：日本人の美徳とされる謙虚さが、グローバルな視点ではどのように捉えられるかを考察し、文化的な自己反省を促しています。
4. **具体例の使用**：スポーツや接客の例を使って、日本人の礼儀正しさや親切さを具体的に説明しています。
5. **提案の実用性**：英語教育を強化することが、実際にどのように国際社会での影響力につながるかを論理的に述べています。
ただし、意見の一部は他国との比較に基づいており、文化的な敏感さを考慮する必要があるかもしれません。全体として、提案は現実的であり、実行可能な戦略を提示しています。
Now that Japanese fertility rate is at its lowest level, population is rapidly declining, leading to economic downsize. As the economic power falls, Japan’s international presence won’t be as prominent as before. However, Japanese should continue to take an active role in world affairs for the benefit of the country. To do so, Japanese government should strengthen English education as a national policy to ensure that students can acquire practical language skills so that they can be influential in the international community In the future.
In my arrogant opinion, Japanese people are unlike other Asian countries such as China and Korea, highly respected in the global community. It is because most Japanese people are polite, hospitable, and respectful to others as well as places they visit. For example, Japanese athletes never protest unfair judgments from referees in the international competitions, instead they refrain themselves from getting upset, sustain polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect opponents. On the other hand, when Chinese and Korean athletes cannot accept judgement, they protest so badly that they cry, yell and leave without shaking hands with opponents in a show of respect. Moreover, in restaurants, many foreigners are deeply impressed by waiters’ hospitality. They say how polite and kind they are. It is also famous that Japanese fans willingly clean up their surroundings in a soccer stadium after a match.
Japanese people are modest (not showy) in personality, yet their craftsmanships are very much professional and high in quality. Japan’s exported goods are highly appreciated. This humble and dedicated nature is a kind of virtue that they have long inherited from their ancestors over generations.
However, when looking at the world, this humble and modest characteristics of Japanese personality might give somewhat negative impressions on some foreigners. In the ever-competitive global realm, it is better to make one’s opinions known and approach people with own views. We need to understand that modesty is no longer a virtue outside of Japan. Instead, it could become an obstacle for us to achieve something great in overseas.
In essence, acquiring language skills is a key to improving our communication skills. Successful communication skills will enable us to better persuade and negotiate with others. It will even let us engage in leadership roles in international organizations. Developing global human resource is going to be decisive factors to enhance global competitiveness. Therefore, Japanese government must address the challenges to foster students who could be influential in the world by providing practical English education.
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**Revised:**
Now that the Japanese fertility rate is at its lowest level, the population is rapidly declining, leading to economic downsizing. As economic power falls, Japan’s international presence won’t be as prominent as before. However, Japanese people should continue to take an active role in world affairs for the benefit of the country. To do so, the Japanese government should strengthen English education as a national policy to ensure that students can acquire practical language skills so they can be influential in the international community in the future.
In my opinion, Japanese people are, unlike those from other Asian countries such as China and Korea, highly respected in the global community. This is because most Japanese people are polite, hospitable, and respectful to others as well as to the places they visit. For example, Japanese athletes never protest unfair judgments from referees in international competitions. Instead, they refrain from getting upset, maintain polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect their opponents. On the other hand, when Chinese and Korean athletes cannot accept a judgment, they protest so badly that they cry, yell, and leave without shaking hands with their opponents in a show of respect. Moreover, in restaurants, many foreigners are deeply impressed by waiters’ hospitality, noting how polite and kind they are. It is also well-known that Japanese fans willingly clean up their surroundings in a soccer stadium after a match.
Japanese people are modest in personality, yet their craftsmanship is highly professional and of high quality. Japan’s exported goods are highly appreciated. This humble and dedicated nature is a kind of virtue that they have long inherited from their ancestors over generations.
However, when looking at the world, these humble and modest characteristics of the Japanese personality might give somewhat negative impressions to some foreigners. In the ever-competitive global realm, it is better to make one’s opinions known and approach people with one's own views. We need to understand that modesty is no longer a virtue outside of Japan. Instead, it could become an obstacle for us to achieve something great overseas.
In essence, acquiring language skills is key to improving our communication skills. Successful communication skills will enable us to better persuade and negotiate with others. They will even let us engage in leadership roles in international organizations. Developing global human resources is going to be a decisive factor in enhancing global competitiveness. Therefore, the Japanese government must address the challenges of fostering students who can be influential in the world by providing practical English education.
---
**Specific Corrections and Improvements:**
1. "economic downsize" to "economic downsizing"
2. "However, Japanese should continue" to "However, Japanese people should continue"
3. "Japanese government" to "the Japanese government"
4. "in the international community In the future" to "in the international community in the future"
5. "In my arrogant opinion" to "In my opinion" (removing "arrogant" for a more neutral tone)
6. "polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect opponents" to "polite mannerisms, and never forget to respect their opponents"
7. "leave without shaking hands with opponents in a show of respect" to "leave without shaking hands with their opponents in a show of respect"
8. "craftsmanships are very much professional and high in quality" to "craftsmanship is highly professional and of high quality"
9. "humble and modest characteristics of Japanese personality" to "humble and modest characteristics of the Japanese personality"
10. "own views" to "one's own views"
11. "Developing global human resource is going to be decisive factors" to "Developing global human resources is going to be a decisive factor"
12. "Japanese government" to "the Japanese government"
### 和訳
現在、日本の出生率は過去最低を記録しており、
私の傲慢な意見では、
日本人は控えめな性格ですが、
しかし、世界を見渡すと、日本人のこの謙虚で控えめな性格は、
要するに、言語スキルを習得することは、
### 評価
この意見書は、
1. **問題の明確な提示**：
2. **国際的な視点**：
3. **文化的な考察**：日本人の美徳とされる謙虚さが、
4. **具体例の使用**：スポーツや接客の例を使って、
5. **提案の実用性**：英語教育を強化することが、
ただし、意見の一部は他国との比較に基づいており、
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